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    dots Submission Name: Final sindots
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    Author: Themissingshado
    ASL Info:    22/male/Seattle
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 23/52/32
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Misc/Death
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       just something i started writing in school


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    dotsFinal sindots
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    When the rain falls they will burn.
    They will cry and they will scream
    but there's nothing i can do.
    I look to the sky for an answer
    but as always i get no response.
    All i can do is embrace the falling flame
    and back to the dust from whence i came.




    Submitted on 2005-05-09 20:15:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this because it is not complicated, and you dont delay on explaining the point of the pem, this is really good, it is emotional.
    | Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by JGo | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and to the point. Yet graphic and exillerating. Very nice job, i think it was very emotional and held a very good point.
    I also like the fact that you didnt rhyme it until the end, it made it all the better. Good job-

    jenn
    | Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]


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