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    dots Submission Name: Half Hearteddots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHalf Hearteddots
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    Part of me wants to charge forward with all pistons firing
    and leave a long dust trail behind me.
    Part of me wants to lie in bed and weep.
    You get miffed when you ask what's wrong,
    and I say "everything and nothing".
    I'm a fool to think you could understand
    how small frustrations accrue into tragedy,
    but I suppose I should thank you
    because I get sick of your prodding
    and put on my coat and go out
    and do what I need to do
    however half-heartedly.





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      Your piece describes depression exactly - as well as most people's reaction to it. It's hard not to be understood. After awhile, those who just don't get it don't even try to hide their frustration and that just makes the depression deepen.

    For those of us who have been there, you echo our feelings. For those who haven't, well, maybe they will understand a little better.

    Thanks for sharing, Amy. mae

    | Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by mae | [ Reply to This ]
      "everything and nothing" ...exactly so.

    And do what I need to do
    However half-heartedly

    These lines so honestly capture the whole thing...being an auto-pilot...functioning.
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      great write. and so true. I can relate to it. sometimes I wish that I couldn't, but that's life. anyway very well done.
    | Posted on 2004-04-06 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]


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