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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Purple clouds
    that melt into the sky
    dance on my walls
    for me to remind
    the little things
    in this world
    I used to cherish
    as a child,
    a sweet innocent girl

    and when life seems
    to pull me down
    I step inside
    a room of pride
    full with smiles
    instead of frowns
    spoke with truth
    not of lies

    I stare into my lilacs
    and return to adolescense
    wishing it forever
    in my mind a message
    "Bring me Back"













    Submitted on 2005-05-10 12:39:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's really good, in my mind at least.

    Favorite lines:
    "I stare into my lilacs
    and return to adolescense
    wishing it forever
    in my mind a message
    "Bring me Back" "

    I can relate with what is going on in my life right now, I think I may how you feel when you wrote this. I love your choice of words, keep up the great work.

    †Bree†
    | Posted on 2005-05-10 00:00:00 | by Destined | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice sentiments, lucky we've got memories. eh?
    I think you got your message across well here, and wouldn't mind if it had gone a bit longer, maybe a brief descrition of some of the good things about childhood.
    Nice little poem,
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-05-10 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I very much enjoyed this piece and liked the tone. It's so very important for us to keep a part of ourselves that child of Creation.

    I liked the second stanza and found that to be a very positive picture and statement!

    Thanks for sharing! Love,Peace,Joy! Have a great day!
    | Posted on 2005-05-10 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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