Description: what the hell is this about u ask? well its mind candy. it makes one think...does it make u think!? i dont know tell me what this is about to u. thx
-sun
mind candy -------------------------------------------
beautification-
a tongue twister of oversiplified emotion
mathmatical dances across the fractals.
systematic equation destined to conquer the world
the power of god
the manipulation of time
touching the past my spirit comes alive
and the other dies.
a duplication in the astral plane
it simply cannot be done
it shouldnt be done
here in my hand
the power to explore my decisions
and undo them as i wish.
to much power-to much knowledge
for one person to contain
when exploring the depths-the wireframe of the vast universe
the knowledge, the truth...
hurts...
Excellent write. This is sure to find a place in my 'favorites'. It's the delicious blend of information drowning the brain, one after the other...or all at once. A temptation for the psyche.
I had to read this 3 or 4 times, just because I loved it so much. I really like your style. This piece is just a reminder of your talent. I'll be reading more from you, and I hope to see some new work from you as well.
great work. it is indeed "mind candy" and I quite enjoyed the candy for my mind. it loves to think of things like you have here. anyways, on to my thoughts of what this means. I think that it was kind of like you were writing from the standpoint of god, having illimitable power to do with as you please. all of the references to mathematics kinda showed me this as well because mathematics is the only thing that will never change. either it is or isn't correct. and, in my personal opinion, that is the single-most prevelant evidence that a god of sorts does exist. ok, I think I'm done for now. oh, I loved all the higher language you used. very nicely written. keep it up.
good god, those where some awfuly big words lol. well now that I have done as Browndelight has done and looked them up in the dictionary I must say good job! The having to take the time to look things up in the dictionary kind of sucked but i liked it all the same!
Interesting. A poem about time travel? At least that's what I got from it. The concept is interesting, and certainly original, but there isn't much meter or rhyme that I could discern... But maybe that's your thing.
You should check out the movie Primer. It deals with the ethics of time travel and such.
mind candy indeed...thank goodness for online dictionaries.. lol.
okay now that I have read all the definitions of the words I had never known before (by the way thanks I love learning new words.) I'm going to say that to me it sounds like a mathmatical orgy of sorts lol *shrug* sorry I loved the way this read, it had me reading it out loud kind of like a person possessed and speaking tounge...because i didnt know what the hell i was saying or what it meant...but I still give you brownie points for teaching me new words and having a wickedly flowing piece.
maybe when you have the time you can explain to me the muse behind the words...
Submission Name: mind candy
