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    dots Submission Name: mistaken faithdots
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    Author: acapone
    ASL Info:    32mnh
    Elite Ratio:    1.87 - 24/25/10
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 716
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 292



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    dotsmistaken faithdots
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    Illusions of faith control the dead who lay a waste.
    preconformed by the demonic they couldnt know they didnt want it.
    lost in limbo for sins commited they didnt know they just did it.
    So pray pray for these faceless souls maybe god will save them I do not know




    Submitted on 2005-05-10 19:00:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was alright. It seemed like the flow was off or something or maybe it's just my own taste. I'm sorry for saying that, but it's the onlything I can think of saying.
    | Posted on 2005-05-10 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]


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