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believe


Author: Deep Ace Thinks
ASL Info:    35/M/ Spring, TX
Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 124 /190 /60
Words: 59
Class/Type: Poetry /Alone
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a re-submit...


believe



adrift on unfamiliar currents
broken compass, no sign of land
hostile seas subside, I close my eyes
sails in flight, I reach for your hand
alone in unforgiving forests
the wind howls a strange serenade
blackened skies belie unanswered cries
as shadows and dreams , so shall they fade …









Submitted on 2005-05-10 22:28:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Believe that the hand you reach for will someday, somehow, someway be there. That is what I get out of this. Hmmm...Billy Idol screaming, "I'd give you all and have nothing" Rebel Yell. Yes, you are right...we all feel alone sometimes and this was a very nice portail of "HOPE". Thanks for re-posting it.
Dave
| Posted on 2005-05-11 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm not sure I completely understood this one. It sounds very dark to me, don't know why the title "Believe". But I must say that the imaginary is wonderful. You obviously know your way with words. So, keep writing.
| Posted on 2005-05-11 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]


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