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    dots Submission Name: Feeling Alonedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 822
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       this is self explanitory...I was standing on this hill last night...in the woods and I was alone but i still felt like I wasn't the only one.It was strange.
    Tell me what you think.


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    dotsFeeling Alonedots
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    I stand up here and the air is cool
    the night is crying this time
    I hear it scream
    I know this pain
    I have been here before

    I stand alone, a world below me begging for help
    if you just listen you can hear
    all the pain
    all the anger
    every tear that falls tonight

    listen with your skin
    and feel everyone hurting just like you
    feel everyone being alone just like you

    I stand back waiting for an answer to questions I don't know
    I just feel helpless
    and a bit lost I guess
    I hate being here alone

    but can the world hear me?
    do I sing pain like they do
    out here in the dark, far from anyone
    far from telling you that tonight I wanted to be beautiful for you
    far from telling you that I don't wanna be alone




    Submitted on 2005-05-11 11:52:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. I know that things are bad for you at home, but mabey this is all happening so you can beter appriciate something in the future. Something or someone. I think that all of this will work out in the end.
    And if you don't already know, Mamaw came home yesterday.There is still nothing they can do, but at least she is going to be home for a while. After spending so much time at the hospital, I have decided that if I am of age I am going to voulenteer at the hospital in Scottsboro over the summer. I don't know much about it now, I am supposed to call the hospital soon and get some information. Do you think you would like to do it too? That is if you are going to be over a lot this summer.
    But I've kinda strayed frome the point. I loved your poem. It displayed your emotion very well.
    | Posted on 2005-05-11 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      I believe that you stood on a mountain top screaming this one out. Either that or just sat there and cried. Pretty much a hope less little write telling us that you don't want to be alone.
    Cool and nice
    | Posted on 2005-05-11 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]


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