Description: You'd probably need a musical background to pick up a lot of the word-play in this, but I think the meaning is clear enough. I had fun writing this, a lot of fun, working these terms into sentences where I could build from them. Things like "sharp sign", "slur", "tie", "natural sign", and things like that were all musical phrases.
Let me know what you think, this was sort of a branching out experience for me.
Piano Key Poetry -------------------------------------------
That note you wrote me, months ago
Still screams at forte in my ears
It causes me to slur my voice
Until it is legato
Because you cut the chords;
But if I had a choice
I'd whisper in piano
As I wrote you in return.
I'd tie us back together
And twist back incomplete measures
I'm not sure how I'd shape the phrase
But there wouldn't be a doubt
That it would be a natural sign
That would lead us to crescendo
Out of this diminuendo.
You never meant to lose your tempo
It was simply a sharp sign
Of another bad momento.
I know we'd move ritardando
As I'd play you the piano
Just like we were before
I'd smile ivory
And we'd read poetry
And play out how it used to be
All righty! I like to consider myself a musician, although that might be an insult to all those musicians with a considerable amount of talent out there....but that's besides the point. The point is, I recognize the terminology and thought you used it quite cleverly! This is going to be a favorite, just so ya know! I'm a music addict, and so how you used the music related words was especially delicious from my take on it.... "That note you wrote me...." Well I take it as of course, a handwritten letter (note) but then of course, a note as in an F or a G or perhaps a note in ones voice which is just unfinished music, really. I think you did well with your 'branching out' and I hope you continue to branch out with Poet-TREE HAHAHA oki bad joke...but strangely enough a new poem that will be hitting the shelves of elite soon.... so I must conclude myself with a NICE JOB! Hope to read more, honestly!
First of all, ur musical terminlogy is spot on. Do music at school and everything you've written is just so right for all u pianists out there (im a guitarist, kno pizzicato, legato, staccato, only in fingerpicking style, its my best :p)
"Out of this diminuendo. You never meant to lose your tempo"
This i gather, is out of this disaster - diminuendo, u used a musical word to describe 'disaster' a piece of work u tried to compose, that went wrong and you never meant to lose ur tempo - speed antics? but tempo as in temper?? no. you remind me of a 4 year taught pianist in my music class, however, she may possess the role of a pianist but i doubt she cud write a piece of poetry as wella as u can.
I'd smile ivory And we'd read poetry And play out how it used to be
When i read these lines, and the whole, I am admiring your poetry skills and how you can link ur musical talent into your writing skills. Its a hard thing to do, but u my friend have accomplished your mission, [censored] hell yeah, ur intelligent mate, keep writing!