Description: Let's try this, it's random, but I'm taking a break from dark.
Make way -------------------------------------------
Evil sweeps through the darkest night
Shall you live to see bright sunlight?
Joy makes way for demon flame
Retracting to the shadows again
Doth it’s power grow weak without light?
Or does a candle burn best in the deepest night?
Does the fear of the shadow keep your torch cold?
Can majestic flames be anything but bold?
Fear bathes the earth in it’s shadow and might
Destroying that fear comes with shining light
Doth fear tremble in submission to fear itself?
Or does fear break under mirthful wealth?
Does your power fail you in the place of sin?
Can you find the courage to finally win?
Evil sweeps through the darkest night
Until evil makes way for what is right
This is a most interesting poem. I like how you have written this with so many deep questions and the lines at the beginning and the end really make a good impact to introduce and end this poem. I think you have used the word fear in this piece just a bit too much and maybe other words meaning the same thing would help to give this more character and variety. Overall, a very good poem and with a few changes this could really be a very noble and thought provoking poem. Take care.
I think you have the most intriguing mind. You have alot of things to think about, and you put them in a wonderful poetic way. You know I'm not one to judge by age, but to think you are 12 just blows me away. You are very talented and I can see it will only become more intense as time goes by. Thank you for all your work, it gives me interesting things to read Denise
Nice, nicely done, I like the change in the repetition of the opening at the end, very effective. "Fear bathes the earth in it’s shadow and might Destroying that fear comes with shining light Doth fear tremble in submission to fear itself? Or does fear break under mirthful wealth?" Too many "fears" in here to sound good, read good, or make any sense. Other than that, I thought is was very good! Be Happy Graeme
Submission Name: Make way
