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    dots Submission Name: My Passiondots
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    Author: Destined
    ASL Info:    17/f/wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    5.29 - 86/68/17
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 181
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 382



    Description:
       THIS IS FOR YOU CLOUD!!!!!

    This poem was made for Cloud, his passion in my words. Enjoy!!

    (Last line, is Clouds.)


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    dotsMy Passiondots
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    I sit in my slumbers,
    Amazed by my passion that sits before me.
    My love for it continues to grow in numbers,
    For those who can not see.

    The smell of the sea that dwells in front of me,
    With the salty taste that lingers on my tongue.
    It is that of tuna that my passion may be,
    stop trying to take every breathe from my lung.




    Submitted on 2005-05-11 21:01:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow, nanana that was lovely and short it is so true, there seem to be a lot of hidden messages in this poem which is always good. My fav lines
    " I sit in my slumbers,
    Amazed by my passion that sits before me.
    My love for it continues to grow in numbers,
    For those who can not see."
    I love it because it seems so mysterous(that's it spelled wrong)
    well I wuv ya nanana and I'll try to work on that poem.
    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      How true, nothing like love in numbers. As a physics major, I am grateful the word numbers, is even in there. As for growth in numbers I’d imagine he means, exponentially… I mean she. Thanks only great people can make something from tuna.
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by Cloud_lion | [ Reply to This ]
      "My love for it continues to grow in numbers"? I've always thought love just increases in magnitude/ intensity, not in numbers. "It is that of tuna that my passion may be,
    stop trying to take every breathe from my lung". What does tune have to do with your love? I dunno what you're trying to say, but i guess if Cloud understands and appreciates it... who am i to complain?
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by pinkchilli | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooooh, I think you've got lots of hidden stuff in this, can only speculate privately, but I like it.
    My only pick, is, if you dedicate a poem to someone, write more that 8 lines for them.
    That's all
    I liked waht you wrote
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-05-11 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]



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