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    dots Submission Name: Releasedots
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    Author: ariesmind
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Atlanta
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 75/79/18
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 236
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    The beauty of sex,
    eludes my being
    The pleasure too short,
    to sacrifice my emotions

    Tired and drained,
    from this facade of love
    The sinew of my interest withers away,
    with each thunderous curse and powerful blow to my self esteem
    The lustful moans no longer cure my irritation
    and tender kisses have turned rancid

    Time has run its course ten fold,
    for our unity

    I am destined for greater meaning

    My mind and soul have already elevated,
    from deceit and pain
    My exterior bound in chains by your touch,
    screams "LIBERATION"

    Put down your weapon of seduction

    Release me







    Submitted on 2005-05-12 00:18:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nice job here portraying the shallow emptiness the narrator feels. At some point most of us realize sex isn't everything. Nice write.

    Peace,

    joey
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I was really drawn in by this write. I can understand it, in a way. It's written well, and with great emotion. It's definetly different, original.
    Sex is, at times, a facade of love. But also, if "both" are in the same mind-frame, it can be a wonderful, fulfilling act of Love. It all depends on BOTH giving (physically AND emotionally), as much as recieving.
    Otherwise, it does come out being what you've stated above..

    I may be all wrong in YOUR actual meaning ...but as a reader, this is what came to me from reading this.
    I like what I see here. The words, the way it's written..and the originality.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]



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