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    dots Submission Name: Chiosesdots
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    Author: Nagow
    ASL Info:    20/f/Denmark
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 56/70/29
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
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    dotsChiosesdots
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    She had hard choises to make
    things she couldn't fake
    which road was she to take
    the future made her shake

    for the first time
    she didn't know
    how her life would shine
    where she would go

    what if here choises were wrong
    the time was too long
    she had to keep her mind strong
    and sing her own song




    Submitted on 2005-05-12 04:29:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Standing on the edge........

    Very good characterization of someone standing on the threshhold of a life altering decision. I hope she had the courage to dare.

    Couple of important spelling errors here (they may be intentional?). Choices spelled 'choises' sveral times in the poem, but 'chioses' in the title.

    Good work,
    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]


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