Description: It is that time of year, when all my friends go camping to our favorite place...Ginnie Springs. It is the most beautiful place, and every time I go there it feel like I'm going home. The poem is more describing that feeling, when you go to where ever your heart feels happiest.
A place to feel happier,
Somewhere your heat seems clear.
Nothing to disturb this feeling.
Taking a deeper breath
To hold this into your own
Even if it is only till you exhale.
The chill goes through me
As I look onto the water
So clear
So precious…
But not only to myself
But all who share her beauty.
She gives the most
And expects nothing in return.
Only that in her you find
The place that makes your heart
Drop to your knees
Every time you come back
To the place where your heart found
True happiness.
This piece really tells how you are feeling. Wanting to stay there and not wanting to leave. Its nice to have happiness. Sucks to be alone. All people should have a place like this, otherwise when things go wrong, they could only try reason to make it better. Reason never makes anything better. Wow. Sry Im off subject. Lol. But good job. Id like to hear more from you.
i can think of one (actual) place that makes me feel like this. where my mom grew up in south carolina. it's so peaceful and relaxing, i absolutely loved it. i just love going back to my southern roots when i'm there. the other thing that i attributed to this was... well, being in love. just the way the last stanza was written:
"She gives the most And expects nothing in return. Only that in her you find The place that makes your heart Drop to your knees Every time you come back To the place where your heart found True happiness"
it just made me think of a quote i heard sometime ago, can't remember it exactly but it was something like "love needs nothing, wants nothing..." something like that. but this was beautiful. great job. ...bb...
The last line "True happiness" seems to tie the piece with a bow. You draw out a great joy and greatness. Your power with emotion amazes me time and time again. Stunning writing, excellent. Nice use of illiterations to show your point.
Submission Name: Ginnie Springs
