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    dots Submission Name: Ugly Boydots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 963
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       Nothing man absolutely fucking nothing.Just tell me what you think.

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    dotsUgly Boydots

    I lay in this room you have built for me
    newspapers on the floor to soak my waste
    pictures on the door to display your face

    In the picture I see your eyes
    green and mocking
    pale and laughing

    In this room I am not alone
    there are others that you have thrown away
    other hearts that you have painted in pain

    In this room, inside your heart
    I scratch the walls to make you bleed
    I wound your heart to make them see
    you're ugly
    just a boy with a beautiful face
    not a drop of reality soaks in your skin
    you're human
    not uncapable of making mistakes
    not poweful enough to keep me locked in
    you built the walls up high
    but I walk on the hearts you have shattered
    and I climb out
    not completely without scars
    but whole enough to do away with you

    Submitted on 2005-05-12 11:50:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The imagery is truly amazing in this poem.This poem made me feel really uptight for some reason lamo.I also felt serious at the same time.werid huh?~!Your such a strong poet.You use such strong words.You really describe how you feel.sometimes i find it hard to take in some of your emotions.Im not sure if actually feel the way you write if you do i feel srry for you cause that must be a hard to feel so alone all the time.anyways this poem again is rated higher that i would rate most poems so have fun and keep it up and plzz get happier!
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Jazzy, i know u once told me who this is about but i forgot who? well im a dunce anyways...lol...but this is a good poem by the way i hope that you post more cuz you havenfor awhle...welll again i do like this one an ill ttul...take care and best wishes...bye
    | Posted on 2005-05-22 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem. So powerful. So deep. I see the image of you walking on others hearts to get out of the hole someone has put you in. I see the pain and feel the anger. I love that even though you are hurt you get through determined to show this person they didn't win, can't win, and won't win. This is a great piece. Great job. :)

    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]

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