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    dots Submission Name: Curiositydots
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    Author: Areinaka
    ASL Info:    20, F, Oregon, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 130/114/29
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 850
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    Description:
       This is an acrostic alliteration. Hope you like.

    I decided to try something that the Gadfly did. I posted something on xtremegentleman's page that included the words cursed curiosity, and I decided to go from there.

    This probably doesn't make much sense, but I don't care.

    You know how hard it is to find words that start with "y" that have something to do with curiosity?!


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    dotsCuriositydots
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    Cursed curiosity, coarsing, corrupting carefully.
    Ugly, undulating uncertainties.
    Rending, ravaging, rough ruminations.
    Insanity incites ignorant intelligence.
    Ominous opinions overwhelm oblivious obedience.
    Silently sneaking, sour sentiments slip.
    Intellectual ideas ignite integration.
    Total termination turns to terror.
    Yesterday's yawns yield to yells.




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      Thank you for the dedication. You did a marvelous job and used some very colorful expressions, which really attacked the acronym well.
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      Being curious perison translation nosey lol your title capture my attention. Then your description was interesting so on to your poem I read and find this alliteration maddness..."Silently sneaking, sour sentiments slip.
    Intellectual ideas ignite integration.
    Total termination turns to terror.
    Yesterday's yawns yield to yells." wow! Major brain twister. `always write poetry, Chery.
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this idea, and you got through without a nitch. Excellent use of alliteration. I love how even though it's a bit tougue-twisterish, it all means something. Very cool. Nice write, very creative!

    *hugs a plenty*
    SouthrnQT
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]
      You have made extremely interesting use of alliteration, I have seldom seen every word in a line having the same letter and the result has a very rhythmis effect. The poem is though, a little short, at times it doesn't make too much sense, and it leaves me with the odd feeling that it is unfinished. A bit of editing would be a good idea, or maybe too phrase it better, a little bit of tweaking. The poem has too much merit, in my opinion, for one to not try to improve it to its fullest.
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by Mimevas Lemqi | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this, it's got a sort of grim acceptance to it, that you can tell the world isn't perfect, but you still have a curiosity to learn about it.
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by Anticlownperson | [ Reply to This ]
      I Like This A Lot. It's Interesting How You Made Every Word In The Line To Have The Same Letter As The First Word Of Each Sentence. And You Made It So That Everything Made Sense And It Didn't End Up Like Some Badly Written Random Poem. Maybe I Should Try Challenging Myself To Doing Something Like This. Anyhow. This Is Something Worth Adding To My Fav's. Hope To Hear More From You. And If You Do Another Piece Like This, Let Me Know! I'd Be Glad To Read It! Take Care.

    _Latez

    bianca
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by binkerz | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an awesome idea. I think I might have to try this sometime. The write turned out great I think. I agree with treybur, you set up some strict rules but still produced a wonderful piece. Awesome job!
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      very imaginative and unique. you did a great job and much better than I could have especially with the y's. I too think you found all the perfect words and summed up curiosity to a tee! I really enjoyed reading something fun for a change.
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is cute, gave me a smile. You have a good grasp of words. Nice little piece.

    Peace,

    Joey

    [argh! computer says I need more words...Jimmy I hate this feature!]
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      This is cute, gave me a smile. You have a good grasp of words. Nice little piece.

    Peace,

    Joey

    [argh! computer says I need more words...Jimmy I have this feature!]
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      well that's just cool! that's it, up and down, back and forth, most impressive. you limited yourself, bound yourself by these rules, and you still communicate a viable message. daddy like ;)
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]


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