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Author: Rhaine
ASL Info:    25/Yes/An Alley
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Words: 106
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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la la la la la la......kidnap the easter bunny.....put him in a jar......


Like a bad habit
I peel the blood from my eyes
And dip my quill
Into the acids of you heart
Writing you a song so sweet
That the ripest cherries
Rot into nothing
And stink so foul that
The loveliness of my soul
Climbs out of my body
Through my mouth
And screams in agony
As she witnesses
What I have done to you

Lying and shriveling
On the dark wet ground
She cries all my fears out
Her white soaking up the fluids
Of the body you once had
And now I am
No longer afraid

Submitted on 2005-05-12 18:40:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  indeed, dark is quite the word to describe this work. however, scary i would not call it. it's not that i'm into the whole goth thing, it's just that i find it somewhat... hmm... don't want to say arousing, but more... appealing to my mind. something about the whole dark, mysterious lifestyle strikes my fancy, but i doubt i would tred the path myself.
| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by hybridmagnolia | [ Reply to This ]
  Dark, Disburbing, strange, weird...shall I go on? To me those words perfectly describe your poem. It is beyond the norm...which hopefulyl it was intended to be. So don't take offensive, though I'm sure you probably will when I say that I loved your poem! So you know I was joking about the offense. I love wierd, dark poems and have written quite a few along that line myself. So good write!
| Posted on 2005-05-14 00:00:00 | by Mimevas Lemqi | [ Reply to This ]
  I f*cking love this ....
Climbs out of my body
Through my mouth
And screams in agony

Sorry for pasting that ...but holy [censored] how i loved those lines ...This is just ...A+ ...wonderfully sad and creepy xoxox
| Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
  Gruesomely lovely and lovingly gruesome! Ba-dow! I give it a 1/3rd sized shake with extra whipped cream because i love your work... Don’t let the monkeys go to your hed though, okay? I’m BACK! -Peace, love and asthmatic kittens- The Madd One~
| Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
  This was a pretty good write.. I was actually expecting it to go into a different direction because of the title. But it was a GREAT poem. I liked it. When I first read it the like 3rd line kind of made me paused. . it was unexpectant. . i liked it! Good job. And I am looking forward to hearing more from you.
| Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by Blindly-N-Love | [ Reply to This ]

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