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    dots Submission Name: A Lonely State of Minddots
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    Author: Blindly-N-Love
    ASL Info:    17/F
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 197/141/29
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/
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    Take it how you want. Im in the state of mind that cant feel but cant imagine life like this to truly be there! I sometimes wonder if Im a mental patient, locked up. No clue of whats really there, or who I truly am! ENJOY. . and if you dont oh well!!


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    dotsA Lonely State of Minddots
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    It drives me wild,
    The blade against my skin
    I can't help but to feel in control
    I know that this is something that only I can stop
    I cant hide behind my fears anymore
    The coldness in my heart and soul
    Burns with anger and grief
    The emptiness in my eyes
    Made me blind from all that hurts
    I cant feel love
    And I cant feel your hate
    I dont care how you feel
    I just care that Im still breathing
    The pills my friends give me
    Makes me so very happy
    But on my trip down
    I get so evil
    Like a spawn of satan himself
    But deep down lies a dying angel
    And with her last breath
    She turns to hate
    And dies. . No longer will I be sane
    Im just the girl wrapped up in a box
    6 feet under all that I've lost




    Submitted on 2005-05-12 22:06:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Intersting.. putting yourself in anothers shoes just as I do often on poetry. It's fun to imagine, be creative be someone your not
    I can't help but to feel in control
    I know that this is something that only I can stop
    I cant hide behind my fears anymore
    The coldness in my heart and soul
    Burns with anger and grief
    The emptiness in my eyes
    Made me blind from all that hurts

    A well writen dark poem indeed
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by Emmalee | [ Reply to This ]
      ahhhh...mazing. thats all i could say wile reading this peice. its dark and beatiful. it takes u somewere u know u shouldnt be but u want to be there, you need to. its amazing. one of your best works yet. i love it truelly i do. if ur ever on aim when i am ill im u, k. peace out...
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by PiecesOfMyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, this is very dark and earie, and because of that I can't really say that I like it all that well. And I'm sure you dont care, but it's just my opinion. I really hope this is not how you feel...what a shame if you do. Suicidal attempts, self mutilation, or pills and drugs, or whatever wont take you anywhere but down. It saddens me to know that people use these things as a way out of their problems...but don't you see they only cause more? Anyway just thought I'd share my thoughts with you...as for the poem...I just wasn't feeling it, sorry.
    Amber
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by Amberdy | [ Reply to This ]
      This peice is very dark. one of self hatred and woeful scorn.

    There is a poet, that you remind me of. She did her writings in the 1800's and wrote of her failed suicide attempts.

    (I forget her name at the moment)

    The peice is well done
    it flows with conviction.
    It has a sureal tone and demeaner.
    It portrays a soul in torment.
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by Unicrom | [ Reply to This ]


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