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    dots Submission Name: I love youdots
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    Author: ARCHIE
    ASL Info:    37 YOA Male in Africa
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 90/126/40
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    I love you
    morning sunshine rain and dew,
    I love you
    storm and lightning thunder,
    I love you
    claw snatched words of anger
    I love you
    peace and still serenity
    I love you
    for the children you have bourne
    beautiful every day.
    I love you
    for the words of hate and scorn
    I love you
    for the music in your soul
    I love you
    simply as you make me whole.




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    ||| Comments |||
      although i am not that much into the mushy stuff, i thought this was still good. The repetitiveness worked well here. It was very heart-felt and beautiful. I loved how you focused on the whole of the person instead of just the "good" things or the "beauty" of the person. every part of a person, the good and the bad, is what makes them who they are, and if your going to truely love someon, you love it all. great work!
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it, it's the first love poem i've seen that shows that love is more than a pretty face or a nice body, that everyday life tends to happen, but the love is still there.
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      well i dont care for love writes, but this was the better of them i must say. it wasnt bad but the repeating of i love you is a little weird but it ties together pretty well.
    -sun
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by Sun | [ Reply to This ]
      usally repeating the same line over and over doesn't work, but in here it worked better then i would have thought.

    akili
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]


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