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    dots Submission Name: I'm Always Wrongdots
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    Author: ashlee_jane2003
    ASL Info:    24-female-Indianapolis
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 210/210/39
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 299
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 919



    Description:
       I decided to re-post this because I didn't get the response that I was looking for because I posted it when no one was online. Silly me!


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    dotsI'm Always Wrongdots
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    Control me with your words,
    Come on, you know you want to.
    Control me with your opinions.
    I know that's what you want to do.

    Hurt me more than I already am.
    Tear through my saddened soul.
    Make sure you tell me that I'm dumb,
    And let your words take their painful toll.

    Go ahead, break my worthless heart,
    With all your angry and vicious thoughts;
    And don't forget to take everything
    Even that little bit of happiness for which I fought

    Leave the shattered pieces that are me behind;
    Don't try to put me back together.
    Make sure you've murdered every part of me
    Then leave me behind forever.

    So please, just get this over with.
    I've hurt for far too long.
    Kill me with your fatal words
    Just to show me that I am always wrong.




    Submitted on 2005-05-13 01:53:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Mmm, you're on the ball today.

    What really shines about this piece is the forceful emotion. Too often darker pieces seem to be full of empty words, but just doing a preliminary skim over this piece it manipulated how I felt.
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by Pax Parvani | [ Reply to This ]
      love the way you express yourself in this poem
    the others were right you are good
    the feeling you convey of anger and the knowledge you have of people that just cant help but see all the wrong in you instead of giving you the benefit of the doubt acknowledging your good
    keep upnthe good job there sport
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by Angel McCalmon | [ Reply to This ]
      Love it. Too bad more people don't take the time to comment on here...it truly is one of the fallbacks of a good website. You have talent and know what you're doing and the true sign of this is that the reader has a sense of feeling from what you have written...Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]
      You know when i read this i thought of a story i read about a boy that had gotten beaten my his mom. She never said good job or well done. Its saddens me to hear this type of stuff. Is there are story behind this. Please let me know. It was well written. I appreciate you getting your feelings out.
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by pvt.ackerson | [ Reply to This ]



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