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    dots Submission Name: backup regret.dots
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    Author: wilted_
    ASL Info:    20/f/singapore
    Elite Ratio:    5.22 - 138/110/29
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 993
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       what better way to do away with boredom at work than to scribble something about nothing in particular only to find meaning in it? any criticisms are appreciated.


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    dotsbackup regret.dots
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    Certainly,
    it was more than
    a regret overdued,
    to pursue the moon
    that deserted its sphere
    to revolve around elsewhere -
    no longer defying its
    charted route.

    She was left to bask
    in the shadows of
    rays, that were meant to direct
    a different course.

    And its sun, will not
    lend warmth.

    The fog lifted,
    only to acknowledge
    the departure of self-imposed reality.

    you became a second alternative.

    Are you a mere memory that comes to mind
    in my moments of weakness?




    Submitted on 2005-05-13 07:40:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this one a lot. I have to totally agree with Hyproglo, you did a great job backing up the title.

    you became a second alternative.

    Are you a mere memory that comes to mind
    in my moments of weakness?

    I agree again, when hyproglo says these are his favorite lines... they are the deepest and most hard-hitting in my opinion.

    Great work. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

    Unicorn.
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by Unicorn Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice title...I think you did a good job of translating the write into something that backs up the title as well. Probably wrote the poem first, then gave it the title?

    you became a second alternative.

    Are you a mere memory that comes to mind
    in my moments of weakness?

    Those were great lines. Have a good one and keep writin'
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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