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    dots Submission Name: Euphoric Lovedots

    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsEuphoric Lovedots

    Euphoria set in, traps her,
    she opens herself up, lets it seep in,
    lets it run through her veins,
    invites it into her head.
    She's spinning, floating, soaring,
    high, higher than the trees,
    up through the clouds, past the stars
    and then down...down.....
    Fog encircles her, she can't see clearly.
    It seeps through her skin, it fills her mind,
    it shades her eyes. Confusion, disarray,
    everything is fuzzy, cloudy, foggy.
    She faintly sees images of her and him,
    the images blend together,
    melt like a crayon over a burning flame,
    the faces drip, smudge into one another.
    She is watching a movie, her movie, her life.
    She's confused,
    she can't see where she's going,
    she can't see what she is doing.
    She is spinning round and round,
    blending with the colors and faces,
    dancing in the colored raindrops of faces and emotions.
    She drops to her knees, closes her eyes.
    Silence, the spinning stops,
    the fog lifts away from her body, far away.
    Although the fog has lifted, her vision is still blurred.
    Her life is a fog, being carried away by the wind.
    Where she'll end up is not known to her,
    she lies back and surrenders to it........

    Submitted on 2005-05-13 11:27:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow gera, I think this one means alot of things in a lot of different ways. We are all victims of Euphoria, and pleasure, if you will.
    Great write, as the rest are too.
    BTW thanks for the comments, come check my other stuff out too =p.
    - Big Bill
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]

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