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    dots Submission Name: This Place They Call Alonedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Alone
    Total Views: 749
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1206



    Description:
       This is just how I feel right now, far from everyone and it's kinda lonely but at least there is no pressure here, I have no one's expectations to live up to but my own and I don't think that I care anymore.


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    dotsThis Place They Call Alonedots
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    My head is light today
    no one around me see's me
    and I guess that is okay
    I kinda wanted to dissappear
    I kinda needed to escape

    cause this pressure won't fade
    and it's all always coming down on me
    these tears won't go away
    and they're all from reality
    the place that I need to get away from

    My friends all walk by me
    smiling and having fun
    and I walk down these halls
    ignoring every one
    cause I guess I just need to be alone
    this place that I am used to
    I guess I'm in my home
    this place that I am glued to

    cause this pressure won't fade
    and it's all always coming down on me
    these tears won't go away
    and they're all from reality
    the place that I need to get away from

    the place that you call home
    the place that cast me out
    I'm here in this place they call alone
    far from all the doubt
    far from all the pressure
    far from every piece of my life
    cause I don't think I can handle it
    and still be alive




    Submitted on 2005-05-13 11:56:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really loved this, it hits close to home.
    the reality is so true.. you did a great job of making real... letting everyone feel your pain.
    It can be a hard thing to do, really write out your pain. you did a beautiful job though.
    Keep writting. Great job-
    joy
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great Jaz! I love this. You did a great job. I feel like this sometimes. I like the dark and depressed mood too. What really cought me was "these tears won't go away...and they're all from reality...the place that I need to get away from." I think that evryone needs to escape reality sometimes. Anyways..the whole thing was [censored] great!
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      This again is brill .. i love all your writes they're so full of raw emotion and this song is wicked... you any good at writing music ? you could have a hit!
    Well done Jaz
    x
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really beautiful. I would love to hear this song. It really touches me. You've written the way so many feel.

    cause this pressure won't fade
    and it's all always coming down on me
    these tears won't go away
    and they're all from reality
    the place that I need to get away from

    That makes so much sense to me, i relate to it so much. You've done a really good job with this. Well done!
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]


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