The Key to My Heart

Author: painofthanatos Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 684 /571 /86 Words: 107

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The Key to My Heart

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These tears won't stop falling These cuts won't stop bleeding He loves me You're confused But one thing's the same Neither of you will talk to me He's looking through old love letters Looking for the answers You're looking through everyone's minds Looking for the answers Why don't either of you ask me? I am the keeper of the key -The Key to My Heart- Neither of you knows Where exactly to find the lock I'll give you a hint It's not there Stop Staring He's looking for the answers You're looking for the answers No one's asking the right questions...

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Well I'm not the first to pick these lines, but what can I say, They are good! I'll give you a hint It's not there Stop Staring So true, and yes I have fallen victim to wandering eyes also, but hey is it really my fault when today's shirts are ever more revealing and its almost inviting me in. Anyways, the poem was not about staring down someones shirt, but more of two people. I like how it is like two things are going on at the same time; all the thoughts rushing in his head and at the same time yours. It really helps to show the confusion of the whole situation without confusing the poem. All in all I really liked this poem. Good Job!

| Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Snowball_24 | [ Reply to This ]

I really like this piece, it had a nice flow and fell into place naturally. The topic is all too familiar and you have captured the indecision and confusion perfectly in prose. another good piece from lady Paino

| Posted on 2005-05-15 00:00:00 | by cainboy | [ Reply to This ]

haha, yeah i love that stanza: "I'll give you a hint It's not there Stop Staring" yeah, uh huh, stop looking at my chest man! i hate when guys do that... anyway, this was nice. i'm curious though, why don't you imagine yourself in that yard? ...bb... XoXo ~TaY~

| Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]

i definately liked this, except the concept of a "key to your heart" is something that is somewhat over-used. [[I'll give you a hint It's not there Stop Staring]] haha that didnt happen to stem from the day when everyone was looking down your shirt, did it? lmao sophie

| Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by sudie | [ Reply to This ]

this is interesting caught in the middle of two people who are both in love with you but share one thing in common theyre to scared or shy to ask to b w/ u i dont kno that what i gto for this.. great read kiu -Darkwarrior

| Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by Darkwarrior | [ Reply to This ]

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