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    dots Submission Name: Devindots
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    Author: Rue
    ASL Info:    16/F/the dark side
    Elite Ratio:    4.54 - 244/182/44
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       my brother. rather dissapointing really, as my role modle, sibling and guardian he let me down big time ant it's caused some inner turmoil.


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    dotsDevindots
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    You don't know how much this hurts me.
    To say these things I don't want to say, but have to say them either way. I was hurt and hurt badly, Much pain did I forego. By someone I thought wonderful, though plain it was for all to see, all pain inflicted he did enjoy, And much pain did he inflict on me.

    Now that he's gone here I remain, safe as safe could be watching fools numerous go by, almost everyone I see. Wanderlust is perceived, yet must be deceived, lest I leave and forget, only to forever regret. Never said I'd wait, I vowed it to myself. Yet wait I do, in vain. Never claimed to hate, yet hate I do, whilst I wait.

    You left without saying goodbye, although, I'm sure you tried.
    You let her take you, and much pain I did not forget. Memories and photographs are pushed aside, and I toil in sweat to relinquish thought. I can't complain, for it's something I can do, to cloud my mind and erase you. Yet still I've not managed to fully let go.

    But the sad thing is you see, I told him how much I love him, but he never did love me. He uttered not a word, or a deed to let me know, That he, my brother, loved me, and thus it did not show.

    Now he's my neighbor, and only that, I lock the door and stay safe as could be, to make sure he knows that I know, that he used me.




    Submitted on 2004-04-06 10:15:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      we've got the same name. i chose this name when i was about your age, too! first i spelled it 'Roo' after the Winne the Pooh charector, then i changed it to 'Rue' because it is a variation of the hebrew word for spirit (Ruah) and because it means 'street' in french, and because of its english menaing, too. this poem you wrote is very evocative. you have a powerful pen, kid, i'll look forward to reading any new ones you have to offer! impressive!
    | Posted on 2004-04-06 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      Never mind. i fixed the &#8217; problem.... just had to edit it. Sorries... and thank you much, for any comments.
    | Posted on 2004-04-06 00:00:00 | by Rue | [ Reply to This ]
      it messed up i guess... the &#8217; is supposed to be a simple '. heh... all of them... it doesnt ruin it though. At least I don't think.
    | Posted on 2004-04-06 00:00:00 | by Rue | [ Reply to This ]


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