Us Two? -------------------------------------------
I live in sub-standardization!
I've struggled through retribution!
I've had to use improvisation!
I'm used to alienation!
I'm a victim of exploitation!
I'm a subject of fascination!
I have'nt got a direction!
I have no education!
Do you live in deep depression?
Have you struggled through desperation?
Have you had to use intuition?
Are you used to the rejection?
Are you a victim of humiliation?
Are you a subject of infatuation?
Have you got an addiction?
Have you no consideration?
a definate 8 yeses for me as well...I liked this one, maybe not as much as some of your other stuff but it was still good. I think what I didn't like, and it might have meant something to you or been intended to some effect that I didn't get, but I didn't like the exlamatoin points at the end of the beginning lines, it just seemed a bit too much of a point. but again even this write shows that you have sooo much talent. keep writing, --jess--
8 yes's my friend...indeed indeed indeed indeed indeed indeed indeed indeed...this was lovely and I love the style, I think that WhisperShout was right about the whole Adam Sandler thing...but I think that it is great that you were able to make all those words work with what you were saying.awesomeness yo. Peace My Friend Jazmine
I feel like Adam Sandler-I want to read this with a cajun accent... ray-tri-beyoo-shone, des-pair-ay-shone... I'm not sure if you are exploring the use of the same word endings, or if you are afraid of something not rhyming. If it is the first, then good for you. If its the second, then shame on your for not taking a risk! I can't decide if I like it or not, which is okay. I don't have to like it if it makes me think, which this does. Keep 'em coming.