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..::So Happy::..


Author: Timmy S. Edgar
ASL Info:    38 male Melb, Australia
Elite Ratio:    2.6 - 263 /200 /71
Words: 77
Class/Type: Rant /Happy
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Description:


Passing thoughts
just exuding a certain vibe


..::So Happy::..



So Happy So Happy
My life is such a carnival
So Lovely you see
Just so lovely
To be so positive
In my mind
If you would look...
... If you look!
It is a glowing
Warm white light
That you would see...
As you see!
It stems from my thoughts
Focus that see's my destiny
along with my passions
Which provoke my lifes perfection
For me you see
All is destined....

.....To be Continued.....




Submitted on 2005-05-14 03:23:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Excellent
I really cant wait to see the other part or ending to this
I saw myself quite easily in this write
As I refuse to let negativity invade my space
When I feel it I quickly walk away from it
This is a powerful write and worded very well
Thank You for sharing this
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  i like that it's upbeat and not so damn dark, but I didn't really get what you were trying to say. nice word usage and form.
| Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
  i really like this. it flowed pretty well even though it was a tad choppy. I think i got something diffrent out of this then the others. oh well..
| Posted on 2005-05-14 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
  i agree a refreshing happiness to the work. so many works focus on sad but our work is our feelings. are you going for a continius peom? good feelings go further with them
| Posted on 2005-05-14 00:00:00 | by Mommabear | [ Reply to This ]
  I think the last part was better than the first part and might have blossomed nicely as you kept going. It's nice to see someone writing about something happy as alot of poetry is very doom and gloom these days. Unfortunatley, I found it a tad simple and I reckon you have the capability to express your happiness further in a more complex manner.
| Posted on 2005-05-14 00:00:00 | by popular_myth | [ Reply to This ]


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