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    dots Submission Name: ..::So Happy::..dots

    Author: Timmy S. Edgar
    ASL Info:    38 male Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.6 - 263/200/71
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Rant/Happy
    Total Views: 865
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Passing thoughts
    just exuding a certain vibe

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    dots..::So Happy::..dots

    So Happy So Happy
    My life is such a carnival
    So Lovely you see
    Just so lovely
    To be so positive
    In my mind
    If you would look...
    ... If you look!
    It is a glowing
    Warm white light
    That you would see...
    As you see!
    It stems from my thoughts
    Focus that see's my destiny
    along with my passions
    Which provoke my lifes perfection
    For me you see
    All is destined....

    .....To be Continued.....

    Submitted on 2005-05-14 03:23:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
    I really cant wait to see the other part or ending to this
    I saw myself quite easily in this write
    As I refuse to let negativity invade my space
    When I feel it I quickly walk away from it
    This is a powerful write and worded very well
    Thank You for sharing this
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      i like that it's upbeat and not so damn dark, but I didn't really get what you were trying to say. nice word usage and form.
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this. it flowed pretty well even though it was a tad choppy. I think i got something diffrent out of this then the others. oh well..
    | Posted on 2005-05-14 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree a refreshing happiness to the work. so many works focus on sad but our work is our feelings. are you going for a continius peom? good feelings go further with them
    | Posted on 2005-05-14 00:00:00 | by Mommabear | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the last part was better than the first part and might have blossomed nicely as you kept going. It's nice to see someone writing about something happy as alot of poetry is very doom and gloom these days. Unfortunatley, I found it a tad simple and I reckon you have the capability to express your happiness further in a more complex manner.
    | Posted on 2005-05-14 00:00:00 | by popular_myth | [ Reply to This ]

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