Description: This is a song I just wrote, I'm not sure how it sounds yet, I haven't proof read it a whole lot. Somewhat fictional.
XOXOXO
Save me -------------------------------------------
These stars they won't they can't hide my fire
I burnt my bridge and loved my sins
I miss your body on my skin
and tonight
(I CAN'T PICK UP
WHAT I LEFT OUT.
I STILL REGRET
HOW I LEFT YOU OUT
WE LEFT US OUT---
WE LEFT US OUT---)
and tonight
I love those satin eyes
my big surprise
and i won't pick up the phone-
Dream a little bit more about me baby
and sink into my heart
i'll cut my heart out- I'm dying maybe-
come on baby- kill me maybe.
(AND YOU LOVE MY HEART MY HEART ME BABY)
come on maybe- kill me- save me.
These scars these scars flash my broken mirror
I dreamt about this- it shouldn't hurt(this much...)
I cut my love my -kiss me maybe- so come on baby- kill me save me.
(CRY LIKE I LOVED
YOU AT ALL
MORE THAN LIFE
IN MY DEATH)
so kiss me save me.
with your blue/grey sky eyes
what a big surprise
you won't pick up the phone-
come on- please just pick up the phone.
Dream a little bit more about me baby
and sink into my heart
i'll cut my heart out- I'm dying maybe-
come on baby- kill me maybe.
(AND YOU LOVE MY HEART MY HEART ME BABY)
come on maybe- kill me- save me.
You look so beautiful tonight------
I hate you for that.
I cry so beautifully tonight-
(GO ON AND SAVE ME
KISS ME MAYBE
KILL ME BABY)
Dream a little bit more about me baby
and sink into my heart
i'll cut my heart out- I'm dying maybe-
come on baby- kill me maybe.
(AND YOU LOVE MY HEART MY HEART ME BABY)
come on maybe- kill me- save me.
that is reall good man. Makes feel all sad inside. BTW what are with the parentes in the song. ex: (CRY LIKE I LOVED YOU AT ALL MORE THAN LIFE IN MY DEATH) This Robert BTW
i also put music to some of my writings.some i havent written down yet this was a better attempt than i have achieved i thinks.flowed nicely i thought.reminded of a song ive heard before i love all types of music.i mean every different style.one of my stronger suits.i have more weaker than stronger lol
Wow! This song had a lot of imagery and it didnt sounds like you were trying to hard. It sounded like it came so easliy and it wasnt forced. I really enjoyed this poem but i especially like this part :
These scars these scars flash my broken mirror I dreamt about this- it shouldn't hurt(this much...) I cut my love my -kiss me maybe- so come on baby- kill me save me. (CRY LIKE I LOVED YOU AT ALL MORE THAN LIFE IN MY DEATH) so kiss me save me. with your blue/grey sky eyes what a big surprise you won't pick up the phone- come on- please just pick up the phone.
^Whoah! I loved that part so much. It sounded like it had a lot of meaning to it.
Submission Name: Save me
