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    dots Submission Name: Shy Versedots

    Author: VanillaLeaves
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 101/110/23
    Words: 15
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       Here's a haiku I wrote for english that turned out pretty well despite the fact that the "natural" sight where we were writing consisted of a stream with both a trash can and a dead duck floating in it.

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    dotsShy Versedots

    Who writes the green verse
    in oak leaf caligraphy
    against the blue sky?

    Submitted on 2005-05-15 17:19:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Very well thought out and thought provoking haiku. The question that will never be answered is asked so eloquently and orginally here. "Who created us?" is twisted to fit nature as well. Very beautiful. I hope you got an A for this assignment!
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by QuietDiscontent | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. I can't write haiku for just about anything (think I've written 100 or so & like 2). Nice job with this. Sounds like there's another poem lurking back there about that stream. Keep writing.


    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      This Haiku is indeed "shy" even alluding teasing as an the guidelines of Haihu says you should meet along with the "nature" theme...Great creativity with "Who writes the green verse
    in oak leaf caligraphy
    against the blue sky?" Had to use the entire poem because it is written as a question...great write.
    `always write poetry, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-05-15 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      I also love the line Oak Tree Caligraphy, its an awesome image. Haiku is a difficult, nature-oriented verse, but I think you did very well (especially under the circumstances, lol)

    | Posted on 2005-05-15 00:00:00 | by Jengrr | [ Reply to This ]
      That is a very good verse, though I don't really know much about haiku so I'm probably not the one to ask. But personally I think its good and would merit being part of a larger piece.
    | Posted on 2005-05-15 00:00:00 | by Mimevas Lemqi | [ Reply to This ]
      Who would have thought that so few words could hold so much? This is a beautiful Haiku. A timid question about creation. A desire to know the origin of things is an age old mystery. You have captured the concept of a haiku very well here. How cool is it that the site was horrible and so you looked up? Very well done. I don't usually give comments like this, but this piece is deserving of it!
    Thanks for sharing,
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]

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