Dirty Girl

Author: manicsmuse ASL Info:    28 Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 146 /161 /55 Words: 34

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Dirty Girl

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Tongues thrashing Hips smashing Booze splashing Hair pulling Teeth biting sweat dripping sweet licking fingers fucking cum sucking Son of a bitch You know what I like One night stand Again tonight

Submitted on 2005-05-15 20:24:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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dirty. raw. caustic. bitter. real. i loved this piece! your style is so blunt and in-your-face! there was no sugarcoating here at all. you just slapped the reader in the face, and the reader thinks that's hott! you did a great job building up the poem with pace and tone. then, at the very end, it took a turn. that was well-done. anyway, this is a wonderful write. keep it up! ^_^ hugs and shackles, ~*dark_and_dreary*~

| Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by dark_and_dreary | [ Reply to This ]

Oh my God! I loved this. It was short and straight to the [censored] point. It was dirty and I love it. SO many single words that build a whole image.. I love it! Melancholymaid

| Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by melancholymaid | [ Reply to This ]

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