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    dots Submission Name: are you happy?dots
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    Author: andnow
    ASL Info:    19.f.wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 136/135/42
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Happy
    Total Views: 640
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 609



    Description:
       I had a notebook and some paper and just wrote down random things that came to my mind.


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    dotsare you happy?dots
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    Are you happy?

    these sunglasses hide the tears.

    But! these sunsets
    keep me going.
    even more so do the
    perfect ones with the
    moon in view.

    And a reflection
    in a lake.
    Or the waves of
    the ocean to break
    this perfect serenity.

    The vagueness of being
    extremely happy and
    content is frightening.

    But in a good way.

    comfort is being OK
    with a zit here or there.

    But most of all it lies in the one whos beauty is on the inside.




    Submitted on 2005-05-15 22:50:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      good points were made
    raw and intriguing,i like random
    i especially liked the vaugness of being extremely happy
    and content is frightening
    a certain depthness shown in all parts

    cool

    wes all toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]


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