I think this is a very moving piece, I can relate to it. Did you write it about a real event?As frozen flame said, I can't seem to get enough of your writing, its so expressive. Call it an addiction if you will, but to a drug called art. You are a very good writer
bam, another fave. i can't seem to get enough of your writing. don't know why. but i can't. hmmm, maybe it's because you're so damn good. listen, you told me you were revising it, and i'll be honest, i like it the other way. but this one seems to hit me more. oh well. i especially like this stanza
"If you tried to teach me that Pain is apart of reality Than let me imprison myself Behind the brick walls surrounding my heart And you keep what reality has to offer."
sticks with ya. keep up the good work kid. love ya