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    dots Submission Name: 'Untitled'dots
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    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 503/510/143
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 1000
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 850



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    dots'Untitled'dots
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    I try to reach out,
    you moved away;

    Your heart stone-cold now,
    untouched by
    new wind of love,
    somebody broke your heart once,
    you want to break mine mercilessly,
    the math in your life
    even now,
    finally;

    The more i cared,
    when you allowed me,
    in those rare moments,
    the farther you drifted
    later;

    I pack to leave,
    with
    burden of those rare moments,
    of togetherness,
    body to body,
    my soul reaching out,
    again
    your soul hesistant;

    I thought my love
    would be
    enough for
    both of us,
    i was wrong;

    Our bond,
    others called love,
    was all
    a soul-sprayed poem
    named
    'untitled'.




    Submitted on 2005-05-16 02:11:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yeah, I'd have to agree with having to hear what the music would be to get what's going on...but it was good...I myself hope to never have to feel this way in any relationship...

    Desser
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by Desser | [ Reply to This ]
      thoughts are catchy.especially the end.i would have to feal the music(hear) before i could go further
    scheme is talent ridding a sense of longing?maybe

    cool

    wes all toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]


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