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    dots Submission Name: It isn't a crime!dots
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    Author: hammyj
    ASL Info:    21/m/Notts UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 130/81/21
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1006
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1594



    Description:
       This is a good two fingers up at those who think that just because poetry rhymes it's done by a six year old and therefore doesn't need the time of day.


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    dotsIt isn't a crime!dots
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    Some people diss me for the way that I write
    They say to rhyme just isn't quite right.
    "It's not really poetry, is it, come on".
    I just want to tell them I think that they're wrong!

    They don't take me seriously, but thats not what I need.
    I want them to take something outta what they read.
    Not to skim over it and put it down with a smile,
    But to show an interest and study it a while.
    They think that by saying, that it rhymes well
    is doing the right thing, they'd rather not dwell

    I don't think they realise: just what it means
    to write down these thoughts, there's more than there seems

    It's not much to ask, just to take a little time
    to look deeper into that 'silly little rhyme'
    They think it's a limerick, or a bit of a laugh
    an ode to a car, or a punchline perhaps

    I guess I am speaking to all those who rhyme.
    Keep going with it it isn't a crime.

    Some say it's easy and not hard to do.
    " I can do it, it' simple, look I'll show you"
    They write something that rhymes and it can be quite good.
    But thats not what I do, I don't write like I 'should'!

    What I'm trying to say is believe it or not.
    A lot of thought goes into these poems I've got.

    And on that note I'm at the end of my rhyme
    Or as some would say the end of my crime.




    Submitted on 2005-05-16 05:14:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this one you really showed feeling and how pissed off you are at ppl how this a poem is just something that rhyms. when a really one in full of the writers feeling and thoughts.
    Cokesu
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by Cokesu | [ Reply to This ]
      I think a poem that rhymes has a better rhythm, but that's just my personal opinion, and I guess a lot of people would disagree with that.
    I find it hard to rhyme sometimes though, but have a clever little tool on my pc that suggests words for me, and I find the one that fits, or it triggers my brain to actually think of one! (which normally happens!). Admittedly writing a poem that doesn't rhyme is ok, but to be honest I don't think as much thought goes into, as it's just a bunch of words, like a story sort of thing, make sense?
    I like the way you've set out this poem though, it flows nicely from one line to the next. I also like the way it has a comical outlook as well as a rant and a rave at all the one sided critiques. I like to read both styles, rhyming and non. It doesn't matter what style a poem has at the end of the day I think there is a meaning behind everyones work, and if you take the time to read it through a couple of times and really digest what you are reading you can see (or even feel it sometimes)
    Anyway, I will stop rambling on now, as a final point I'll just say: Awesome write :D
    x poetic harmony x
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by Poétic Harmonie | [ Reply to This ]
      lmao this was actually a fairly funny rant.....although I know what it was meant to be and I totally agree with what you are saying, it isn't the rhymes that make the poem its the emotion/thought that went into it. Very nice write, pretty straight forward and slightly less poetic then some of yours but it had a good message all the same;)
    peace
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      AGREED THIS PICE WAS CUTE WAS REFRESHING KINDA A PROTEST TO ALL OF THOSE SAD DECAYING SHAKESPHERE wanna bes and the ones who dont respect the dylan thiomas esc any way i never rlly know what im talking about. so it might be in your favor to ignor all that i say any way i liked this

    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]
      poems that rhyme r cool.I dont really see the difference if u rhyme or not as long as its cool.plus rhymes r easier to remember.
    i cant rhyme at all
    cool write
    | Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      alright...you made a very good point. It is hard to gain good critiques on poetry that rhymes. But I agree with you just because it rhymes doesnt mean that there is not a deeper muse behind the sing song flow of a write.

    When I first came on this site (under brownsdelight) I didn't follow the "rules" of writing...I got some harsh critiques on my earlier stuff...but as I said I write for the love of it...not for brownie points. hang in there...keep doing what you do...but also take a chance to look around and view other form of writing also. It's helped me to develope some pretty good posts.
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by ThaCrib | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good.

    I'm absolutely horrible in rhyme; it seems I can't serve both the rhyme and the emotion.

    I admire anyone that can communicate anything at all in rhyme.

    Thanks
    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
      This was awesome...I agree completely and the fact that you used poetry to argue this point is very clever indeed...you have talent, I like the rhymes, always have, it isn't something that I can do well, all my poems are emotion not rhymes but you can do bth and I applaud you for that.Peace man
    Jaz
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...lovin this like crazy right now.there's so much truth in it.i can totally relate to this.i feel the same way and went through the same thing.anyways...very good write.love the wording meaning and the flow.i could tell that you put a lot of deep emotion into it...very good and i hope to read more from you
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by black_joker1292 | [ Reply to This ]


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