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Submission Name: Your Pleasured Amusement dots

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Author:	_winky_
ASL Info:	25/f/minnesota
Elite Ratio:	4.32 - 664/527/95
Words:	104

Class/Type:	Poetry/The pain inside
Total Views:	262
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	590

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Your Pleasured Amusement dots

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My face is coated, with wrinkles of pain
My life is shattered, blood now just stains
Drips to the floor gathering around
My eyes want to close but my body wants more
So I collect all the drips and lick the wounds clean
Look in the mirror at what was once me
Scars run so deep from your sharp edge
And yet,
I call out your name begging for more.
Please get it done and cut me again
Into bite size pieces to bleed within
Dry my pain; make sure you use salt
Please don’t worry; I know it’s my fault.

Submitted on 2005-05-16 13:53:25 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hey...good to see another post from you...this one's quite dark tho...not a typical cutter poem...although that's what it appears to be...<shrug> I hope this is just massive doses of fictional symbolism :(

Hope vegas went well?

:)

Smile?

Happy :?)

Stw
| Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
  Ok. . this poem kicked major butt! I loved it. Im adding it to my favorites. I hope you don't mind, Im sure you don't, but if you do ill take it off, lol. I really enjoyed how you portrayed the pain! It was so realistic! I give it 2 thumbs up! Good Job!
| Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by Blindly-N-Love | [ Reply to This ]
  I can certainly feel your pain when I read this. This is very saddening and dark. I'm sorry you've had to feel this way. My heart goes out to you.

The poem was vivid, it was a smack of reality and it was easily understood. Very good write.
My prayers are with you hun.
*hugs a plenty*
SouthrnQT
| Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]
  oh my goodness, hun, what happened? this is wierd. i know about cutting and i've done it very often... but SALT? are you serious. wow. thats pretty bad. i love the poem but the salt. does sound odd. but i think that it fits lovely and you added iot perfectly, just a little off gaurd and wasn't expecting that. well keep up the awesome work. i'm going to go back to reading more. its beautiful. i think alot of people can relate to thinking its their fault. are you sure it yours though and they're not trying to pull the whole "guilt trip" thing on you? think about it.
love tina
ps this would be fav #2 on my list! awesome for you
| Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
  i was going through my favs list and rereading all of the poems on there and i just want to say that i sooo remember why i put you on my favs list. keep up the great work and i will read more by you soon.
love tina
| Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
  like i said before i love this piece... i was just going through my favs list and this wa there... keep up the awsome work!
love tina
and once again i still love it!
| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]

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