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    dots Submission Name: i'm sorrydots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 535
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    Description:
       i wrote this poem for a guy named dante and we went out for about a month and a half and I broke up with him and now i'm too afraid to talk to him so i just write about him.


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    dotsi'm sorrydots
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    why does he hate me?
    why don't i understand?
    why did he refuse me,
    when i held out my hand?
    i said the i loved him.
    he said he loved me.
    but now why does he want me,
    to just let him be?
    did i hurt him that bad?
    does he know he hurt me?
    i told him i'm sorry.
    why doesn't he see?




    Submitted on 2005-05-16 14:24:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this.I was in this state of mind 3 days ago but I guess Im feebly tryning to take the step and walk away.I ask your permission to borrow this if I give you credit.Well good luck.Peace
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
      Dante eh? Did he carry a big sword and wear a red cape? I jest.
    I can imagine his feelings, for I to am like him. Some of us men are heartless, emotionless monsters. He was trying to like you but he just could'nt because hes just one of those guys. I hope you are over him because he is never going to like you. It as a simple poem that lacked "heart broken" emotion, I suggest you simply try again.

    - Sethesin
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by Sethesin | [ Reply to This ]
      not being able to comprohend is protrayed nicely,but like sandman,i dont think this was written for us.we want to hear what it makes you feel,and compare it to
    well...anything

    cool
    wes all toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm. I think I saw like 3 sentences that weren't questions. Thats not a bad thing though, Sorry I'm not able to answer the questions for you, but I think the fact that he is a GUY has something to do with it...we're kinda dumb sometimes...well...ok, ALL THE TIME
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by Samuel Bielz | [ Reply to This ]
      ineresting enough alot of questions that only the characters in the story have the answers
    good write no bad intent given
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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