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    dots Submission Name: The Blame Gamedots
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    Author: Nirvana
    ASL Info:    13/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 138/204/63
    Words: 433
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Blame Gamedots
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    “Be careful how you throw the blame around,” I whispered angrily; “It might come back to you.”

    “Me? Oh no. No. No. You have it all wrong,” she seethed. “The blame will never circle back to me. It will be pinned on you, where it hurts most; I’ll make sure of that.” Her eyes narrowed. “You are guilty, and you know it. Your punishment is here, and you don’t even have the courage to face it properly. You are a coward, a fool,” she hissed.

    “I did nothing wrong! You lured me into one of your traps, and I was too ignorant to find a way out!” I cried heatedly.

    “Exactly!” She laughed. Then her voice grew cold as she said “That is your fault. Ignorance. Your blame to bear. Not mine.”

    “We are all ignorant. It is what makes us human! Without ignorance, we would be nothing, nothing at all.” I whispered. “We would eventually end up like you, a perfect being that has no life. Or is that why you do this to us? Do you wreck other people’s lives because you have none of your own? Jealousy is a powerful emotion,” I accused her softly. “It is hard to use wisely.”

    She blinked, and then sneered. “I am from a race of perfection. Nothing such as jealousy knows our realm. It cannot enter.”

    “It can,” I said triumphantly. “You want to find a flaw in others and publicize it to make yourself seem great, to make the other person sink to your true level. You think you are perfect. Perfection is an intangible thing. It is a goal that no one can reach. You and your ignorance disgust me.” I proclaimed.

    “I have no ignorance” she spat.

    “Then why are you still here? If you are not ignorant, you shouldn’t be living on the same land as humans. They are a very unaware species. If you are as you claim, you should no longer be with us,” I jeered.

    “You are a troublesome brat;” she seethed. “You will be sorry for this, for you have brought on your own downfall. It is your fault alone.”

    “The blame is on you, this time,” I laughed. “You are subject to your own fate as I am subject to mine. No one controls any one else’s fate, unless they are from a special, intelligent race. And you are not.”

    “I am!” she screamed.

    “Prove it” I said victoriously.

    And she was gone.




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      This was really intresting. I reminded me of something I'd read before, though the subject was a diffrent one this this. I liked how you write this thing and how it all ended.
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      oh whatever gwen. you can too write, and i can write good occasionally. your writing rocks. i mean, come one everyone wants you to eneter your poetry into contests and everyone comments on yours. i never get comments on mine! anyways, thanks

    -Leandra
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by Nirvana | [ Reply to This ]
      wicked. why is it that you can write all this aesome stuff and then say that you can't write worth a damn? and you still say my stuff is good...you're mental. oh well.

    i like this one, if only the world worked that way, where people could just disappear. three guesses as to who i want to disappear...it's really good leandra.

    gwen
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by Anticlownperson | [ Reply to This ]


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