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Author:	dancer06
ASL Info:	20/f
Elite Ratio:	4.73 - 232/171/44
Words:	118

Class/Type:	Poetry/Being a Teen
Total Views:	277
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	755

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eh, im experimenting with new styles, and new things, i have this CRAZY one im working on. its absolutely odd, and i like it. anyways, have u ever just wanted to feel loved, but be left alone? yeah, thats what im going through.

All I Ask dots

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All the yelling has to stop.
Let me make my own decisions.
Please, just leave me alone.

I want to crawl into a small hole and cry.
Maybe die, just to be gone.
Please, just let me go.

All I want is peace and quiet.
A way I can think and reflect.
Please, just let me think.

I really don't want to think at all.
Sleep should ease my mind.
Please, leave me to my rest.

Dark and cold is what I want.
Numb to ease my pain.
Please, just let me be.

Please, just stop yelling.
Please, stop nagging.
Please, mom, don't stop loving.
Please. Please. Please.

I just need space.

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  Sounds like a vacation might be in order here. Just go somewhere and rent youself a cabin in the woods and curl up with a good book or maybe even write your own,but, just get away for a spell. It seems to me that frustration leads to depression and depression is a terrible thing.
Hop the first train that comes by today
Or get on a boat and just sail away
Buy a ticket on a jet airline
But go on vacation and find peace of mind!
!Doc`
| Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  I love it how as teenagers we can never make up our mind as to what we want. I think that is one of the most crucial lessons that we must learn in our young teenage years. Once we learn what we want, we can fix and get rid of what is getting in the way of that goal. My favorite lines of this piece were:

"Please, just stop yelling.
Please, stop nagging.
Please, mom, don't stop loving.
Please. Please. Please."

I like these lines because they demonstrate just that, a mother love will never have room to leave you space or to stop nagging. The one thing I realized is once that is gone you will kind of miss it, its honest advice that came without any strings attached; unless you count being home by 11 a string. I liked your poem and keep in there, once you mature more you will see what I mean.
| Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by Snowball_24 | [ Reply to This ]
  Way to go. Tell them how you feel. It sucks that moms tend to smother. But, they only do it because they care. And, I know Mom loves you. *Smiles* I can call her Mom officially because she attacked me like an official daughter tonight. That was slightly humerous. I sat on your little brother. . . I hope I didn't cause any permenant damage. . *Walks away feeling ashamed*

Love ya,
~Abby
| Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
  Way to go. Tell them how you feel. It sucks that moms tend to smother. But, they only do it because they care. And, I know Mom loves you. *Smiles* I can call her Mom officially because she attacked me like an official daughter tonight. That was slightly humerous. I sat on your little brother. . . I hope I didn't cause any permenant damage. . *Walks away feeling ashamed*

Love ya,
~Abby
| Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
  This was just such a heartfelt piece and it is hard @ any age to have to be around displeasure, yelling, fighting, any negativity.
You are a young woman & soon u will be out on your own & you will see how you can make YOUR LIFE.
I grew up in a dysfunctional (way) home & in some way we all do. I think writing is a great way to get out the things you wished you could tell people, or maybe you have & they are too caught up 2 listen? You are doing the best thing though, recognizing your emotion.
Your pleas, especially 2 your mother, do not go unheard. People are selfish sometimes & don't recognize how they make the environment for other people. Keep doing whatever you can do to find that spiritual peace within yourself & watch the troubles of the world dissipate.
Hang in there girl! These days are learning days & the lessons aren't always fun but they are useful.
Love,Peace,JOy!
| Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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