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    dots Submission Name: I wished you were HIMdots
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    Author: AfricanPrincess
    ASL Info:    21/F/SA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 222/201/31
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1247
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    Bytes: 1053



    Description:
       getting with this nice guy . . . .but all the while thinking of the guy i'm secretly infatuated with (my inspiration 4 "Dangerous Game")


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    dotsI wished you were HIMdots
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    Last night I wished you were him
    When you came close to me - I felt him near
    When you touched my skin - I envisioned his hands
    When you stroked my hair - I felt his caress

    I tried to focus on you by my side
    It was impossible cause you were him in my mind
    Your lips are not as soft as his
    Your arms don't give the his warm embrace
    Your smile unlike his doesn't make me glow

    I know that I did you wrong
    By thinking of him all evening long
    The kissing was sweet - he expresses his passion
    The touching was nice - he loves being sensual
    The foreplay was good - he pleases me completely

    With each word you whispered
    I heard his voice in my ear
    And felt his breathe of air on my neck

    Every action of mine was meant for him
    . . . the yearning I expressed
    . . . the words I whispered
    . . . all my loving gestures

    Last night I wished you were him





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      well a lot of passion here. but me as a man.. i am getting mad.. lol.. well that happened to my ex girlfriend.. she said the title to me .. so bad moments...
    wel keep writing and thanks for sharing ...
    peace and love
    have a nice day
    take care
    Victor
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      i can relate to this more than anything else ive ever read. ive been getting with this nice guy...and the whole time ive been wishing that he was someone else. i have no feelings like that for him and i really feel bad about it. but i could never tell him that im in love with somebody else. oh boyy. Anyways, i love the way you worded this. you described it perfectly. i really hope everything works out for you.

    great job :-)

    *nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing how you placed every word, making it feel more real with each new line. I have gone through that phase of being with someone yet willing to be with another. It's sad, specially when you know it's hurting the person you are with. And it does most of the times... I felt impressed and sad for these couple, but I felt even sadder about the narrator, 'cause her mate will overcome it eventually, but she will always feel the same for the othert him plus the guilt on the other.
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by A_xx | [ Reply to This ]
      How well this poem expresses the deep truth of the female mind. Dispite the heart felt affection of her partner nothing he did would detract her thoughts from another. It is a sad piece that my sympathy jumped back and forth from each of these two people never knowing which one I felt more sorry for. You have written a strong and touching poem, nice work! Dan
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      It's almost bittersweet. I know that I, myself have felt the emptiness of losing someone, then trying to move on with someone else, but you can't seem to let the one you love go. They linger in your heart, in your mind. This is a good example of those feelings.

    *hugs a plenty*
    SouthrnQT
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]
      that is really, well honest.I know I would never be able to admit, even to myself if i did something like this, so I admire you for that.The words flow, and it creates an image in my mind...Rebound, this is what is sounds like...except, your not trying to escape your past, your trying to grab hold and "embrace" it.This was a really good write, and i enjoyed reading it.
    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]
      It is hard to be with someone when you want someone else, but sometimes the person that you want is absolutely the wrong person. Lust is one thing, love is another. Lust never lasts more than a couple of years. Love endures. Still at my age I fall prey to lust, but I do love my husband so like you I fantasize and remain faithful. Wondereful write. Look at all the things it brought out in me.
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by greensnake | [ Reply to This ]


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