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    dots Submission Name: Pain of the heartdots
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    Author: Gothik
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 94/133/31
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsPain of the heartdots
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    Why do you love me
    Isn't it over with you
    You keep on telling me
    I love you
    But the truth is I hate you
    Even if I dont want to
    Why are you doing this to me
    Cant I go free
    I'll never again belong to you
    Please release me
    'cauz one day you'll kill me




    Submitted on 2005-05-17 07:45:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have already read this one, but I never commented...I wonder why...
    I like it. It reminds me of the times when people say "I think we need a break" But then everytime you talk to them they are all "You do know that I loved you, right?" and the "I still love you, we just needed some space"

    If you TRULY love someone, space will only do just that, build a bigger gap in your relationship, space = broken!

    Sorry...*Hugs!*
    Bon
    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought I'd already commented on this! oh well.. this was a really sad poem, though it was shortish. But it was good in it's shortness, hope to read more from you!
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Intense. Who's this about? Well anyway, this is a wonderful piece. I have to agree with Joyce RL, give me more! Good write Francis.

    <3 Rain
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      I have a feeling that this write is very personal to you but I suggest that you add some more images in it so the readers could picture your emotions well. Readers can relate to the beauty of simplicity you portray but I just can't help but ask for more. It's a good write and your title is striking. Just a few more words would make your work great. Good job!
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by Joyce RL | [ Reply to This ]


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