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    dots Submission Name: Heart on the Roaddots
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    Author: garnet4david
    ASL Info:    20/M/Indonesia
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 88/87/65
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Any comment needed, is this one funny or romantic enough hehe seek your help


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    dotsHeart on the Roaddots
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    Waiting in a fate in a loop
    Searching in your eyes for a hope
    Floating together to the clouds
    But.....................................
    Today, you chop my heart like wood
    I wish that i could....
    Love you on the roof
    and take you to my road

    Thx to Lady McBeth for helping me correct the error seek your help on my next poem




    Submitted on 2005-05-17 08:52:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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