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    dots Submission Name: In Betweendots
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    Author: Sun
    ASL Info:    18/m/tn
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 43/54/14
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       this is an exploit of the inner world we all create and live in. some call it a fantacy, others call it our percenption of the world and how it could/should be.


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    dotsIn Betweendots
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    Darkness is the void between
    all your rights and wrongs
    ill concocted ideas
    that you know just dont belong
    its hard living in your fantacy
    while being pulled back to reallity

    when the two worlds become a blur
    and you cant pull them apart again
    the darkness is whats in between
    killing you from within

    i want to go to my fantacy world
    and never come back
    where this place fills the happyness
    that in reallity i lack

    my fantacy tells a story
    the story has no end
    it tells you what you want to hear
    over and over again

    the fantacy's an addiction
    a sickened oblivious obsession
    it is ofen critisized and harrassed
    only to be met with objection

    i wnat to live in fantacy
    but reality pulls me near
    im stuck between in darkness
    facing my greatest fears

    i'll neverlive in fantacy
    until my reallity is gone
    then i can live in the world i've created
    forever and ever on.




    Submitted on 2005-05-17 08:58:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      in moments brief we meet in shadowed groves before the rain. together chasing green.

    you sound like some one who may just understand.


    it reminds me of "Imaginary" by Evanescence. it was your lines about blurred reality that drew me in. i problem that some of us suffer from worse than others. when personal fiction is only a heart beat away. the rhym scheme seems to take aware from it atleast for me. but that s a personal hang up.


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    | Posted on 2007-08-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      And yet again, I relate to this poem also. I've had that problem so much these past few years because of my dislike for this world and life. I buried myself into another world, with others online, to game and be in a place where outsiders don't bother us. It feels safe there, and I can relate to it in this poem...
    To feel stuck in two lives, almost, it seems like... That's how it feels between those two sides.. that you can't stay in one place... you want something you can't have, basically.
    I understand that very well.
    About the poem, I must say there's many mispellings, but the only one that bothered me was that fantasy was mispelled. Since it is the main thought of the poem, I just wanted to let you know.
    As for me, I should write some more poetry.
    Keep writing the awesome poetry.
    -emoCatGirl
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by EmoCatGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I very much enjoyed this poem. It gives the reader a feeling of being lost in fantasy, but caught up in reality. I know that there's times I wish myself that I could get lost in my fantasies, although I'd never leave if I didnt' have to. lol. I think you wrote this clearly, and it has a good structure and flow. Great job hun! Keep up the good work :)

    *hugs a plenty*

    ~Avry~
    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]


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