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    dots Submission Name: Dodging TeddyBearsdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 777
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       This is about my guy friend and there is an explanation to it...if you are curious about anything IM me.

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    dotsDodging TeddyBearsdots

    I've been thinking about you
    I'm trying to get all untangled from this facination with your hair
    and the way you smile
    and the way you don't speak above a whisper

    I've been thinking about you
    trying to dodge every emotion that's thrown at me
    and the teddybear as well

    And I've been thinking
    I can't have you
    I'm trying to hold on to my selfcontrol
    and I fall off the curb
    because you pushed me

    Submitted on 2005-05-17 14:53:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you are sooooo silly. Have I heard the story behind this. If so, I think it's awesome how you can take goofy stuff that happens to you AND TURN IT into something poetic and meaningful. Don't worry, I accidentally hit the Caps lock back there. Read my poems, be-atch!
    | Posted on 2005-07-11 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok i'll try to work this out and i'm probably way off the mark but what the hell...
    No 1 - this guy is gay??
    No 2 - because he's gay you have all the fun in the world with him
    This means that he's messes about with you and throws things at you in a playful way and pushes you in fun? You spend time together and the attraction grows (for you, obviously not him)?? Exactly how far away am i? Miles?! Yeah i thought that would be the case.
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the concept of this poem.. but I think I have an idea of who you are writing bout. Maybe I am wrong. I don't know. I like the title.^-^
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      thanx for your comment on raggedyman i am glad you enjoyed i only submitted it for one hour o so then deleted i thought it was a bad write. anyway anothe geat piece written by you
    great imagery and keeps the reader wondering
    great write and geat read
    thanx again sandman
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      i truly believe to eaches own interpatation,but with a writing like this,expand you must,for us not to fuss.you tried to get me to thinking,and i apperciate that,and i have read some of youre stuff,so capable u are of expanding
    make it as hard to understand,but ultimately give the answers in the writing is what i try to do.

    all one mans opinion

    wes all toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]

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