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    dots Submission Name: Dodging TeddyBearsdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 791
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 526



    Description:
       This is about my guy friend and there is an explanation to it...if you are curious about anything IM me.


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    dotsDodging TeddyBearsdots
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    I've been thinking about you
    I'm trying to get all untangled from this facination with your hair
    and the way you smile
    and the way you don't speak above a whisper

    I've been thinking about you
    trying to dodge every emotion that's thrown at me
    and the teddybear as well

    And I've been thinking
    I can't have you
    I'm trying to hold on to my selfcontrol
    and I fall off the curb
    because you pushed me




    Submitted on 2005-05-17 14:53:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      you are sooooo silly. Have I heard the story behind this. If so, I think it's awesome how you can take goofy stuff that happens to you AND TURN IT into something poetic and meaningful. Don't worry, I accidentally hit the Caps lock back there. Read my poems, be-atch!
    | Posted on 2005-07-11 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok i'll try to work this out and i'm probably way off the mark but what the hell...
    No 1 - this guy is gay??
    No 2 - because he's gay you have all the fun in the world with him
    This means that he's messes about with you and throws things at you in a playful way and pushes you in fun? You spend time together and the attraction grows (for you, obviously not him)?? Exactly how far away am i? Miles?! Yeah i thought that would be the case.
    x
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the concept of this poem.. but I think I have an idea of who you are writing bout. Maybe I am wrong. I don't know. I like the title.^-^
    ~LeAnna~
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      thanx for your comment on raggedyman i am glad you enjoyed i only submitted it for one hour o so then deleted i thought it was a bad write. anyway anothe geat piece written by you
    great imagery and keeps the reader wondering
    great write and geat read
    thanx again sandman
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      i truly believe to eaches own interpatation,but with a writing like this,expand you must,for us not to fuss.you tried to get me to thinking,and i apperciate that,and i have read some of youre stuff,so capable u are of expanding
    make it as hard to understand,but ultimately give the answers in the writing is what i try to do.

    all one mans opinion

    cool
    wes all toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]


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