Nice wordplay here, as always from you. [Why I enjoy reading your work so much.]. I think some of your little pieces like this would work great in something like a children's mag. Have you thought about submitting them anywhere?
Not going to point out that your FORM is all wrong lololololol ...Tiff you just won't be conformed and I love it! Your raindrop format of poetry in abstract and is creatively YOURS and I am glad you shared it with us. You told relayed your stentiment in very few syllables (i ain't gonna count them either lol). this makes your poem "Raindrops F a l l i n g D o w n" Now tiff that is cool! `always write poetry, Cheryl.
I like the way you made it into an abstract poem. It's like the words are falling, as the rain is. You could look into changing the @ simple, into the actual word, though. Other than that, I found it a really good reading. Peace and Love -Aya
good piece something simple the sound of the rain is beautiful to me i've worked outside for the past 20 years and when i smell the rain coming i wait for it to stand in thanx for your comments i will post hunger today so you can view hope you enjoy thanx for all your comments sandman
Nice... but I think that if you made the @ into the actual word, and perhaps put a line between falling and down so that it's easier to distinguish between those 2 words more easily. Otherwise, nice haiku :3