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    dots Submission Name: My Prayerdots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsMy Prayerdots
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    As I lay me down to sleep,
    I pray the Lord will hear my weeps.

    My life is filled with all I love,
    and still I can't seem to rise above.

    Above all this darkness and all of this pain,
    and all of these clouds that are bringing the rain.

    Dear Lord, please guide me,
    through all of this gloom.
    Lay upon me all the strength,
    that my body can consume.

    Help me to find my way to the light,
    where I can be hole again and fix what's not right.




    Submitted on 2005-05-18 08:08:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem was really good there is really nothing to critisize here so i will just say that your emotion was felt here and great job...


    rock on!
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by intoxicated411 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem tells that you are going through alot. I know just how you feel. Overall the poem was GREAT. Keep on writing as far as changing anything I don't think you need to!
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Queen Gemini | [ Reply to This ]


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