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Author:	bleeding-soul
ASL Info:	17/m/al
Elite Ratio:	4.21 - 92/92/13
Words:	121

Class/Type:	Poetry/Angry
Total Views:	322
Average Vote:	4.3333
Bytes:	820

Description:
I wrote this for all the hypocrits and preps that criticise me daily. I hope a lot of people can relate. I want true comments and thoughts.

Hypocritical Eyes dots

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You look at me through hypocritical eyes
Wondering why I'm so different
Taking every chance you get
To criticize me with hatred
You hate me because I'm different
I hate you because you're just the same
Same as the other assholes
Craving the attention and fame
You think you do no wrong
You're shameless eyes don't deceive me
You too,have blood on your hands
You're a sinner,just like me
You hide your lies behind a wall
You wash the blood from your hands
You push your true thoughts into the darkness
You bury your crime beneath the sand
I'm brave enough to be myself
I'm proud of who I am
As of what you think....
I don't give a damn

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  Well said. No one should give a damn about what other people think about them and people shouldn't be judging others because they most likely have something wrong with them to. If you get a chance read my poem Deception. It's similar to this. Great write.
Katana
| Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
  The ending on this poem was kind of weak, maybe you could work with it a little.
The rhyming in this poem was powerful and it didn't fail this kind of write at all, which surprised me a little because sometimes people can't express this feeling of rejection and being different in words that rhyme, so i congradulate you on that.
I can't really say this is original though. I mean, yeah, it's original because it's your work, but since this is a widely talked about subject, I just can't.
But this poem was awesome and is going in my favorites.

Peace....for now or later
*Toxic*

| Posted on 2006-05-06 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
  For a while I was getting worried, I thought I wouldn't find another good poem of yours, but here it is!

Yay, The ending is awesome!

"I'm brave enough to be myself
I'm proud of who I am
As of what you think....
I don't give a damn"

Forgot your period. I do that all the time, no worries.

But, honestly, do you hear how good that sounds right there? I do, it was wonderful!

necrotic
| Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
  whoa... thats awesome.
i bet everyone can relate to that whether they are the bad guy or not. im also adding this to my favorite list. its awesome the way you show how those people that talk about you are fake and dont show themselves.

You hate me because I'm different
I hate you because you're just the same

that was a famous quote and one of my favorites and it suits this so well because its all about that.

Great write.

-BLeedingTears
| Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
  That is so true I hate how people judge others. Like its such a bad thing to be yourself and be different and stand out. People cant stand the fact that your braver than them and have to take you down. Heres a qoute that I that fits with this poem "Few men who have liberated themselves from the fear of God and the fear of death are yet able to liberate themselves from the fear of man."
Lin Yutang
| Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Alura | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this because it is soo true to soo many people and it is especially true to you and me here at Paint Rock Valley...so be happy man casue I sit beside you in sociology and between you and me and COrey (not mine) we CAN totally kick every one in the balls...

Jazmine
| Posted on 2005-09-16 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem was really cool. I really liked the end. You should be proud of who you are! Good phrasing! This piece is very original.
| Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked this poem because i can relate and it kicked ass...its os full of hate and i think it would really get the attention by someone who feels the same way...great poem.purely awesome!
| Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by intoxicated411 | [ Reply to This ]
  the ending is perfect in my eyes. this is a statement and a statement i know well. i've never heard it put like this. you are brilliant.
| Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked it alot this is exactly what me wnd my friends got hrough every day its almoast like you are one of us i can relate and believe me i really can i have blue hair and kinda my own style in fact we al have our own style and its the same day after day after day they do the exact same things we do and its only bad when we do it i can really relate
| Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]
  i like it. but i think the ending is kind of weak. you need to add something, im not sure what, just need to strengthen the ending. good piece of writing. it has excellent flow i really like

You're shameless eyes don't deceive me

good job!
| Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Dorian Grey | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked how you were so angry about how they talked about you, but then you didn't care anymore. The poem itself was a little contradictory, but I think that that was he best part. My favorite part was when you said "you hide your lies behind a wall, and wash the blood from your hands" I think that it had a lot of the feeling tangeled up into it. I really admire you though because it is so hard to not care what people think of you when you have low slef-esteem. Well at least thats how I feel. I can't totally relate with the whole clique thing because my high school only has 50 people in it, but just keep your faith, and everything will be ok. Awesome write.
~alyssa~
| Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]

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