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    dots Submission Name: The Rosedots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsThe Rosedots
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    What do you see when you look at me?
    It's a question that lays heavy on my mind.

    When you see me,
    do you see the warmth of the sun,
    the beauty of the rose?

    Or do you only see the thorn on the rose?
    Are you afraid to touch this beautiful rose,
    because of the thorn that protrudes from it's stem?

    Afraid that while holding this rose, one slip,
    will leave you hurting, leave you bleeding.

    Just be so gentle while handling it,
    you will feel the silkiness of the pedals,
    and consume the sweetness of it's scent.

    Appreciate this beauty of nature and realize,
    that every rose has a thorn...




    Submitted on 2005-05-18 16:30:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Inexplainably good alissa. I can see why I liked your work before. Talent is not the best word to describe you, but I am out of words to use.
    Imagery of this rose, was well depicted, and therefore making it a great write.
    Kudos-
    Big Bill
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
      This entire poem is very well written. I loved the images i got from it and the whole thorn thing in this was pretty cool.
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem has absolutely beautiful imagery! I love the metaphor and the age old message! I really don't think you could have done a better job :)
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Kitty | [ Reply to This ]


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