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    dots Submission Name: Waitingdots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
    Total Views: 736
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    Bytes: 629



    Description:
       This piece may be a little annoying to some, but it is really what is going on in my head right now!


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    dotsWaitingdots
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    I'm waiting,
    for what, I'm not quite sure,
    but I'm waiting.
    For so long I've been waiting.

    Anticipating the day,
    knowing the day will come.
    Longing for the time to come,
    that is meant to be my future.

    Happiness, love...
    I don't know.
    I'm so eager, so certain that the day will soon arrive.
    I'm so hopeful.

    My belly is in knots,
    the butterflies are fluttering.
    I can feel it slowley approaching.
    I'm waiting patiently,
    for what...I'm not quite sure.




    Submitted on 2005-05-18 16:40:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem was one of the more mysterious and leaves me thinking, could this be a soul stuck and waiting to be set free or your inside waiting for the perfect time to show. maybe im way off base but thats whats i see.
    L.O.
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how you didn't detail, youre waiting for something that you dont know, so its appropriate that this should be vague. I feel this way sometimes...Keep your poetry coming, its so good!
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this, aminily becuse I've felt like this many times. I liked the way you wrote this, i love the fact that this is a tad vague becuse it seemed to go along with the whole idea.
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      I think we all find ourselves waiting from time to time.

    Typically I advise people to be specific in their work, detail out the images. Still, I like the way this poem is vague. You're waiting for something and you don't know what. The poem doesn't seem to know either and that's fitting.

    Nice work. Don't wait too long to submit another!

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]


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