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    dots Submission Name: Candy Shop Romancedots
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    Author: zyllion
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 171/117/20
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 349
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 1368



    Description:
       This was inspired by part of friends poem. I had lots of fun writing it. Comments would be appreciated.


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    dotsCandy Shop Romancedots
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    Together they walked in
    Hand in hand
    In love
    Heaping handfuls
    Into ever-heaped bags
    Oh, my love

    I've loved you forever
    My friend forever
    Chocolate
    Gooey handfuls
    Just Gotta have more

    At only ten years
    He walked in
    Eyes wide
    Drooling
    How I want more

    Three years later
    He walked in
    Eyes wide
    Drooling
    First girlfriend by his side
    Still he wants more

    I've loved you forever
    My friend forever
    Chocolate
    Gooey handfuls
    Just Gotta have more

    Don't mind the dentist
    Cavities: Who cares
    Toothbrushing: No time
    I want more

    Sweet sixteen
    Current best girl by his side
    Pays no attention to her
    He's in the candy store
    Grabbing bar after bar
    It's love at first sight

    Poor girl
    All alone
    Not her kind of guy
    But he doesn't know
    Doesn't see her leave

    I've loved you forever
    My friend forever
    Chocolate
    Gooey handfuls
    Just Gotta have more




    Submitted on 2005-05-18 20:55:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I adore chocolate, but ur guy beats me loool.
    Had a good laugh reading ur poem. Very light and very nice read.

    Have nothing really to comment on just this.

    Peace
    Viviane
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by babyblue002 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this is so, origonal! I really like it!! THE chorus is the best and the meaning behind it totally was hidden until i read it a few times. Some guys just can't get enough X.x. Just kidding. Great write, man i've been seeing more and more lyrics around here I'm excited to read more of your stuff.

    ^-^ chyo, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Maki | [ Reply to This ]



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