I've read some of your writings before..and I love them all...my boyfriend just got back from Iraq in October...and your poem pretty much described my life for those 7 months he was there. I would honestly sometimes just stare out the window..and look at the moon...the sun..the stars...and just think to myself that he's looking at the same sky and he's thinking about you too. Comforting sometimes. :) This was a beautiful write. ~hailie~
Hey, wink! You really hit the spot with this one! It's a fave for sure!
I disagree with the comment that it needs more -- it doesn't. It stands on its own just beatifully. You take two images, and include the exact amount of detail needed to put the two together. And it's gotta father a twinge in nearly everyone who reads it. Very accessible -- very poignant. Well done!
aww that is so short, but so strong and beautiful...simple and powerful. I love it. Perfect description of heartache and longing. The last line made me cry, cause I know that wherever he is, he is not smiling back at me.
I feel this piece. I have a friend over in Iraq and when I look up at the stars I know that he isn't seeing the same. It's weird how emotions are. I really feel this piece. I'm glad I read it because I was just about to go to bed but I needed something to calm me. This did the trick. :) Thanks! Great job. :) -blt
It is ironic that in order for you to ever see my comments that I must be fairly "wordy". The irony is that I was I going to compliment you on your economy of words. There is not a single word wasted in your beautiful poem. Simplicity can be quite beautiful and your work shows this very clearly.
this is so sad and so beautiful. it's kind of hard for me to find something to say other than how quiet and subtle you've put the heartache. wonderful job and i'm sorry for the crappy comment -the wildchild
a distant love, this is proof that love can survive all situations, no matter the distance no matter the obstacles this love can not be taken away and thats so beautiful to know that this love continues to grow even at a distnce... i loved it