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    dots Submission Name: Signals Before A Downfalldots
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    Author: kjb
    ASL Info:    21/male/NY
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 256/351/64
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Prose/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 469
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    Bytes: 1766



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       "when the gloom sets in. Don't deny, just know."

    -ME


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    dotsSignals Before A Downfalldots
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    found out what was in my mind
    last night
    everything was sorted through
    emotions were already released
    then why does it still ache and pound
    in my mind
    because these are signals of a downfall

    when your heart feels cold
    and the only heat produced is by your frustrations

    when you all you want is to give in
    and not care for anything

    when your eyes feel as though they are under pressure
    and the tears are going to fall inevitably

    when helped upon you deny your heart
    and say "Nothings wrong."

    where the person you love you can't help but hurt
    because the confusion blinds you

    you start to fall as a meteor
    tail flaming
    burning everything behind
    the trail left is desolate
    with words said and actions
    unrepentable

    how do you come back?
    how do you clear your head?
    When it feels as though the very task
    will last you eternity
    the worst of all
    is that most of the time
    you can't even understand what is wrong with you
    but everyone else does
    they can not help
    all they can do is lift you to your feet
    then you have make the first steps
    although your legs feel paralyzed
    and you chant and yell and holler
    saying
    I Can't!
    I Can't!
    I Won't!
    and all you here back is
    You Will.
    you Will.
    You better!
    but after that You Better,
    you realize you can
    because you must
    because if you don't
    the loss will be greater then the present





    Submitted on 2004-04-06 18:15:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmmmm. *pondering* A lot of your earlier work is how I feel now. Interesting. Really, I can relate to this one more then the others so far. *Sighs*
    | Posted on 2004-10-27 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty cool, it reminds me of a song called "Downfall" by a rock band named Trust company, have you ever heard of them, I bet you would like em! Great write, as always!
    | Posted on 2004-04-06 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      you start to fall as a meteor
    tail flaming, I like that, and the repetitive wasn't tardy or anything, good job.
    | Posted on 2004-04-06 00:00:00 | by Anarius | [ Reply to This ]
      this is great. i like the last line the best the loss will be greater then the present cool write
    Pryncess
    | Posted on 2004-04-06 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]



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